I like your current text. Leave “but” out of it.
The only thing that feels off to me is “heroic” Captain Rex. Yes, it’s accurate but it seems unnecessary and highlights nothing in the context.
Post #1455986
- Author
- vranir
- Parent topic
- The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE]
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- https://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/1455986/action/topic#1455986
- Date created
- 2-Nov-2021, 1:11 PM