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Post #1452955

Author
vranir
Parent topic
The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE]
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Date created
14-Oct-2021, 2:50 PM

The only part that sounds awkward to me is the following paragraph:

Meanwhile, the Republic has learned that the Malevolence attack plan had been leaked to Count Dooku, and now fears Separatist spies.

There’s nothing really wrong with it, but how about the following more streamlined version:

Meanwhile, the Republic has learned that a Separatist spy may have leaked the Malevolence attack plan to Count Dooku.