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Post #1452555

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EddieDean
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The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE] + Subtitles for season one!
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11-Oct-2021, 9:33 AM

Hopefully get a quick turnaround on my s01e04 ASSASSIN (v2.0), as it doesn’t need much work. Bear in mind this episode is NOT the original episode called Assassin (where Ahsoka protects Padmé from Aurra Sing), and instead this episode is Cloak of Darkness with only light changes. I’m calling it ASSASSIN to help direct the viewer’s attention to a major character, and because ‘Cloak of Darkness’ was always a bit guff.

Now that I’ve restructured the first half of the first season, this episode fits in a place where it gives and takes context from the surrounding episodes.

So here’s my current idea for the crawl:

  • Conflicts erupt in the early days of the Clone Wars.
  • The Republic have learned the the Malevolence assault plan was leaked to Count Dooku, leading to fears of Separatist infiltration.
  • Having safely protected Duchess Satine from Death Watch, Anakin and Obi-Wan now rejoin the main clone fleet in its hunt for Grievous.

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  • The traitor NUTE GUNRAY has been caught sending Ryloth’s military secrets to his fellow Separatists, and is being escorted to prison.
  • Master LUMINARA UNDULI has asked Ahsoka to help guard Gunray, as they hope to learn the location of Grievous, and Dooku’s plans.
  • But Dooku will not allow that information to fall into enemy hands…

In this context:

  • The villains are correctly used: Dooku strategises and directs the others, Grievous is his huge military asset, Ventress is his surgical specialist, and Nute Gunray is a lesser military leader.
  • In Malevolence, Dooku somehow knew about the incoming assault and told Grievous about it. It was never explained how he knew this. In Cloak of Darkness, we see a Republic guard turned traitor for cash. I think it’s worth playing up the infiltration angle, because it ties up two potentially loose ends, but also because having this much infiltration early seems pretty powerful for our villains. It never gets massively developed in the show, though there are other traitors, most notably Pong Krell, so it adds a little value to attribute that all to Dooku the strategist.
  • I had to mention Anakin and Obi-Wan’s absence so I’ve tied it to the context of finishing up their Mandalore story (using the opportunity to remind the viewer that the Republic should fear a Mandalorian-Separatist alliance, and emphasising why it was important they leave the Grievous hunt to do that), and tied them into the next episode’s Grievous hunt, which wraps up this half-season.
  • I also mention Ryloth here. Our episode s01e06 will be the Ryloth episode, where another Neimoidian has taken Ryloth’s skies, so there’s an opportunity to tie it back to here - perhaps Nute Gunray had some intel he was able to give to Mar Tuuk.
  • The next paragraph sets up this episode, and highlights that the location of Grievous might be known by Gunray, explaining why Dooku’s sent Ventress to rescue or kill him, and tying in to this half-season’s plot.