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Post #1451965

Author
Knight of Kalee
Parent topic
The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE] + Subtitles for season one!
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Date created
6-Oct-2021, 10:23 AM

Version 1 reads more TCW-like, and I stand by vranir’s suggestions. I don’t know if Satine should be name-dropped in the crawl though, feels a bit abrupt (or at least have her full name and title for better context). Maybe just hinting that she’s a particularly close old friend would do.

I’ll see if I can take some time to rewatch Malevolence and see how much it has improved since the last time.

Greetings!