Well done. My wife is going to start the series with me tonight using this version.
Two tiny nitpicks in the opening crawl, both on the second slide:
- “the duo” comes so far from the reference to ObiWan and Anakin that it might be better to say “the Jedi.”
- “But” and “However” are awkward starting sentences right next to each other. If you drop the “However” and start with “They are unaware…” it will read more smoothly.
The only other issue I noticed was a big drop in volume when Ventress jumps up the stairs, which lasts for a few seconds/lines of dialogue before returning to normal.
I’ve just changed the duo to the Jedi, and re-released that episode as v2.2.
I think starting with but, however, and, etc is alright though, so I’ve left that as-is.