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I agree, this is the way.
I agree, this is the way.
Oh yeah, I like version 4 quite a lot.
No tweaks folks? Good as-is?
No tweaks folks? Good as-is?
I say, yes. No tweaks needed.
Very well!
With the reintroduced Yoda narration, and the louder Obi-Wan “Yes”.
Absolute perfection. You are truly one with the high ground and the high ground is with you. Bravo my friend.
Didn´t notice any other issue with the new darf force rising episode, well done 😃
I’m rendering v2.1 of s01e01 The New Padawan now.
Addressing some other comments:
Notes as above. It’s as painless as I can get this content, as far as I can tell, though I still welcome any further feedback!
A REQUEST
This is a long way off, but now that I’m planning on incorporating Revenge of the Sith into my show, I’d better review some edited versions. So, if you guys have any recommendations for preferred edits, I’d like to hear them. I’ll gladly chop and change between versions, if necessary. Bear in mind, my priorities will be:
Happy to review supercuts of ROTS/SOM too, if they’re more than just the two official release versions intercut chronologically.
Thanks in advance!
Mecha Salesman’s 4.5 hour ROTS/SOM cut incorporates deleted scenes and the attack on Coruscant from Genndy’s 2003 Clone Wars. Highly recommend checking that one out 😃
Doesn’t that one just intercut the two release versions chronologically? I know Mechasalesman/Numeraljoker tends towards being a purist/completist, rather than being interested in restructuring.
By way of giving an update, I’ve been working through s01e02 Malevolence lately, bringing it up to standard. This is one of the very first episodes I produced, and quite a complex one too with all the inter- and intra- scene cutting, so it’s taking a while. I’ll be recreating some parts of this from scratch, now that I’m a better editor, to ensure the most polished result.
After this there aren’t any episodes that need nearly as much work done to them, other than my Ryloth episode, so things after this should speed up significantly.
Well done. My wife is going to start the series with me tonight using this version.
Two tiny nitpicks in the opening crawl, both on the second slide:
The only other issue I noticed was a big drop in volume when Ventress jumps up the stairs, which lasts for a few seconds/lines of dialogue before returning to normal.
Well done. My wife is going to start the series with me tonight using this version.
Two tiny nitpicks in the opening crawl, both on the second slide:
- “the duo” comes so far from the reference to ObiWan and Anakin that it might be better to say “the Jedi.”
- “But” and “However” are awkward starting sentences right next to each other. If you drop the “However” and start with “They are unaware…” it will read more smoothly.
The only other issue I noticed was a big drop in volume when Ventress jumps up the stairs, which lasts for a few seconds/lines of dialogue before returning to normal.
I’ve just changed the duo to the Jedi, and re-released that episode as v2.2.
I think starting with but, however, and, etc is alright though, so I’ve left that as-is.
A REQUEST
This is a long way off, but now that I’m planning on incorporating Revenge of the Sith into my show, I’d better review some edited versions. So, if you guys have any recommendations for preferred edits, I’d like to hear them. I’ll gladly chop and change between versions, if necessary. Bear in mind, my priorities will be:
- Adhering to franchise canon as closely as possible (rather than bending to match the OT or PT specifically, for example)
- Compelling narratives (like Hal’s reordering of the events which lead to Anakin’s fall) which bend the plot without breaking it
- Characterisation in line with TCW as much as the PT
- A narrative which fits with TCW and the wider franchise, rather than anything too radical
- Attractive additions and cuts which enhance the enjoyment of the story
- 1080p+ video quality, including incorporated deleted scenes
Happy to review supercuts of ROTS/SOM too, if they’re more than just the two official release versions intercut chronologically.
Thanks in advance!
i´m a little confused: Will you incorporate actual visuals from ROTS into your quality cut?
I would be against that…
We watched 1x01 and really enjoyed it. Looking forward to the new 1x02.
My wife wanted you to know that she didn’t even recognize it as the same show we tried to watch last year. She’s always loved Star Wars, but we just couldn’t get through the original first few episodes of Clone Wars. Thank you.
A REQUEST
This is a long way off, but now that I’m planning on incorporating Revenge of the Sith into my show, I’d better review some edited versions. So, if you guys have any recommendations for preferred edits, I’d like to hear them. I’ll gladly chop and change between versions, if necessary. Bear in mind, my priorities will be:
- Adhering to franchise canon as closely as possible (rather than bending to match the OT or PT specifically, for example)
- Compelling narratives (like Hal’s reordering of the events which lead to Anakin’s fall) which bend the plot without breaking it
- Characterisation in line with TCW as much as the PT
- A narrative which fits with TCW and the wider franchise, rather than anything too radical
- Attractive additions and cuts which enhance the enjoyment of the story
- 1080p+ video quality, including incorporated deleted scenes
Happy to review supercuts of ROTS/SOM too, if they’re more than just the two official release versions intercut chronologically.
Thanks in advance!
i´m a little confused: Will you incorporate actual visuals from ROTS into your quality cut?
I would be against that…
I won’t be having mixed media episodes, but your conclusion of this show (and the Clone Wars journey) should either end up as:
VERSION 1
or
VERSION 2
Not to put any more projects on your plate, but have you considered doing the Battle of Geonosis with a mix of Battlefront II footage and the end of Attack of the Clones? The end of AOTC is such an early CGI Fest, it feels like an animated show!
I quickly threw this together, but wanted to share this idea with more than words. It is definitely too ambitious for me, but could be interesting…
https://mega.nz/file/g1YWWZpJ#GXh5KSkUzGH2r4SK12oS8qv1p4OvflgbeyehxhA4Nto
This is very much a side thing and way lower priority than anything else, but I’ve also been playing with the idea of turning both Phantom Menace and Attack of the Clones into TV-length episodes as a season zero. So essentially this show would emcompass the entirety of the prequel era, as an accessible mixed-media episodic show, that was consistent with (and additive to) canon, but focusing on telling the highest quality coherent story.
The huge advantage of this approach is that chopping into episodes and maintaining my opening text means that I can keep certain plot points offscreen and recontextualise and clarify more of the movie content, and allow us to focus only on the best and most necessary content.
That said, I’d fit all of that around the existing show, rather than the other way around. I don’t want that to be mandatory, and I’d far prefer if my TCW:R allows the viewer to slot in their preferred versions of the movies.
I’ve been wanting someone to do this for a long time. I think it would be good for Revenge of the Sith as well, so you can slot in the final four Clone War episodes in between. I know you are basically doing the opposite with the shows (editing the arcs together) and wouldn’t work since I assume you are doing the same with the final episodes.
- “But” and “However” are awkward starting sentences right next to each other. If you drop the “However” and start with “They are unaware…” it will read more smoothly.
I’ve had more feedback saying the same, so I will look at this again. I’ll check the Ventress stairs audio too.
Very glad your wife enjoyed the intro though!
Not to put any more projects on your plate, but have you considered doing the Battle of Geonosis with a mix of Battlefront II footage and the end of Attack of the Clones? The end of AOTC is such an early CGI Fest, it feels like an animated show!
I quickly threw this together, but wanted to share this idea with more than words. It is definitely too ambitious for me, but could be interesting…
https://mega.nz/file/g1YWWZpJ#GXh5KSkUzGH2r4SK12oS8qv1p4OvflgbeyehxhA4Nto
I wasn’t planning on including any other sources unless it can be seamless, but in the far far future when I come to consider this additional project, I’ll certainly think through others’ approaches.
This is very much a side thing and way lower priority than anything else, but I’ve also been playing with the idea of turning both Phantom Menace and Attack of the Clones into TV-length episodes as a season zero. So essentially this show would emcompass the entirety of the prequel era, as an accessible mixed-media episodic show, that was consistent with (and additive to) canon, but focusing on telling the highest quality coherent story.
The huge advantage of this approach is that chopping into episodes and maintaining my opening text means that I can keep certain plot points offscreen and recontextualise and clarify more of the movie content, and allow us to focus only on the best and most necessary content.
That said, I’d fit all of that around the existing show, rather than the other way around. I don’t want that to be mandatory, and I’d far prefer if my TCW:R allows the viewer to slot in their preferred versions of the movies.
I’ve been wanting someone to do this for a long time. I think it would be good for Revenge of the Sith as well, so you can slot in the final four Clone War episodes in between. I know you are basically doing the opposite with the shows (editing the arcs together) and wouldn’t work since I assume you are doing the same with the final episodes.
I guess I’m not technically going purely for aggregation of arcs so much as “quality of experience”. The main advantage to me of chopping the movies into episodes is that we can avoid difficult scenes by simply covering them in the opening text. Off the top of my head, I might like to do the following:
But like I say, this is far, far away for me, it’s definitely outwith the core goal of this project, so I don’t want to put too much thought into it.
Anyway, let’s focus back on editing. Today and tomorrow I have a good amount of time, and am working through Malevolence still. It’s kind of fine as is, but I’m just tweaking and pruning it, which is taking a lot of time as it’s got a lot of cuts.
Anyway, I’ve taken the recent feedback and been tweaking the Christophsis opening text further. I thought I’d share it here before rendering the episode again. Bear in mind this is our very first episode, so it has to do a little heavy lifting:
Conflicts erupt in the early days of the Clone Wars.
With ANAKIN SKYWALKER’s ascension to the rank of Jedi Knight, his former master OBI-WAN KENOBI has requested a new padawan.
Aided by a small clone squadron, the duo now defend Christophsis, a planet whose crystal factories produce military energy shields.
Count Dooku’s fleet has forced the Republic’s ships to retreat to a nearby medical station, leading to fears of an imminent invasion.
But having detected the distant signal of Dooku’s assassin ASAJJ VENTRESS, a priority target, the Jedi rush to capture her.
They are unaware that comms have just been jammed planetwide…
Notes:
I like it.
If I were asked to edit this text (which I do professionally), I would question whether the word “military” is necessary when describing the energy shields.
I’d also ask about the need to call Ventress “a priority target.”
Both of those details could be inferred from the context and just make the sentences wordier.
Grammatically (especially if you remove the “priority target” phrase), you should add a comma before ASAJJ VENTRESS. The comma would make it clear that she is Dooku’s assassin (the only one). Without the comma, the technical meaning is that she is one of his potentially many assassins.
That’s as nitpicky as I can be. Every version of the text has been an improvement over the previous, and as it stands now, it’s quite good.