That sounds really good imo.
Not to bring up shit that’s already been finalized, but did we decide not to phrase Palpatine’s lines as, “A scavenger girl is no match for the power in me! I am all the Sith! You are nothing!” because we wouldn’t see Palpatine’s face on the “nothing” line? I feel like Rey’s “I am a Jedi” being a direct response to “You are nothing!” would be the clearest way to phrase it, but I can see how that was decided against based on the shots available.
Yeah, that was why the dialogue order in the clip I posted was decided on. Though frankly, I like it being a response to “scavenger girl” better anyway; it shows Rey’s journey since the start of TFA, and is a direct challenge about how she can’t defeat him because she’s just a scavenger, to which she essentially replies “Guess again, bitch.”