sherlockpotter said:
The vision…I’m less certain about. I still love the idea, and it’s something I’ve been meaning to work on myself; but something about it feels too subtle here, I think. I’m worried it doesn’t quite jive with the hyper-agressive way J.J. films his vision sequences in the other parts of the movie, so instead it feels like a nice, tranquil shot of the Death Star. That said, if it matches the tone you’re looking for in your edit, that’s what matters. I do think the concept is effective, and it’s great to see an example of it!

Thanks! It does fit more or less with the rest of the edit, I’ve added other visions and insert shots around the place (see here) that gesture at this kind of style rather than the more frenetic one JJ is fond of. I will definitely be tweaking this a lot more, though.