I really like not having the screams in the cave. The added whispers convey the same sense that the dagger is powerful, ancient, and evil; and not having the screams helps it to feel more mystical. Really nice job cleaning that up!
The vision…I’m less certain about. I still love the idea, and it’s something I’ve been meaning to work on myself; but something about it feels too subtle here, I think. I’m worried it doesn’t quite jive with the hyper-agressive way J.J. films his vision sequences in the other parts of the movie, so instead it feels like a nice, tranquil shot of the Death Star. That said, if it matches the tone you’re looking for in your edit, that’s what matters. I do think the concept is effective, and it’s great to see an example of it!
And it somehow doesn’t seem right to have Kylo mutter about Chewie at the transport. At the very least it would lack the ability to contrive the sort of beat such a line of dialogue would require in a movie like this.
That was a concern, definitely. I can see how it would play out if I were filming the scene myself; but I wasn’t sure if we had enough at this point to have it land effectively.