A rough draft of this project is now available. The most important changes to the overall story of TLJ are listed below (this is in no way a comprehensive changelog):
- Hux is more intimidating and has less moments which directly poke fun at him
- Subtle hints at Finn’s Force-sensitivity, Poe’s spice running, Rey’s lineage, and Palpatine being behind everything
- Greatly expanded upon Luke’s character. He gives more reasons why the Jedi should end, but at the same time isn’t disrespectful of his father’s legacy (the lightsaber). Generally speaking, the audience should relate better with him and find him to be more likeable.
- Kylo Ren still wants to finish what Vader started. He destroys his mask because Snoke says he is “unworthy” of it, and he doesn’t know if he deserves it. He believes following his grandfather’s legacy means destroying his master and the old ways in exchange for a familial dynasty (with Rey).
- Holdo believing there is the possibility of a spy on board is what prevents her from sharing information with lower-class personnel. Poe believes this is extreme.
- Lando Calrissian is the man with the red plom bloom. He isn’t part of the fight anymore because of his daughter being a stormtrooper (although this isn’t revealed until the next novel). He sets the Canto Bight children free at the end.
- Excised unnecessary information with Rose (since she doesn’t play a large role in the next story), along with the Fathier race through the city
- Expanded upon DJ’s belief system. He believes only the corrupt can win from war.
- Ben doesn’t intentionally destroy Luke’s temple, it is hit by a Force storm (from the comics)
- Expanded upon Rey and Kylo’s feelings of inadequacy and abandonment. They both fear not being good enough, so look for validation from others.
- Snoke didn’t bridge Rey’s and Kylo’s minds. Instead, it’s identified as something that either formed or revealed itself during the interrogation scene in TFA. Snoke is aware of their connection, using it to get Rey to him, but doesn’t know what exactly it is.
- Holocam droids capture Luke’s final stand for the entire galaxy to witness on the HoloNet. This includes a new scene on Canto Bight where the gamblers consider the war to be simply a game worth betting on.
- Made the lightspeed ram more believable by explaining why it worked in this situation but not others
- Finn gets a final confrontation with Phasma that is more fulfilling. It’s based on the deleted scene where he reveals Phasma took down Starkiller’s shields. This leans into the “stormtrooper rebellion” idea.
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