I think ideally, I’d like a v4 (the “end” seems to hit harder there)…
I agree v5 is really good, the softened transition into “end” makes it flow much better…
Well, that’s not contradictory at all lol.
All of these attempts feel almost but not quite there. I think that it has to do with how he says the word ‘end’ as if it’s the final word of the sentence. The word needs a bit more attack and depth here in the middle of the sentence.
Funnily enough, this clip of “end” is originally from the end of a sentence, but I started working with it because the original line (where “end” was in the middle) had even less emphasis. There’s maybe one or two other instances that I could play with instead; I’ll see if anything can happen with those.
First time listening to this: I think the only part that needs work is “am a”, it’s said pretty quickly and sounds just a little bit clippy. But the audio of the rest of the scene works great, and the line itself is a fantastic change
Sorry, missed this earlier. I know clarifying the “am” was something that Cap was working on (my version just used the “am” from the original line); “a” has been the elusive part of the whole thing though. It’s such a short, mushy sound in the first place - it tends to blur into whatever words are surrounding it, making a clean extraction difficult - and the original line reading is pretty quick already, so I don’t think there’s much that can be done in that regard. But I’ll at least try to smooth out the clippiness some more. Thanks for the feedback!