I’ve been messing with the big reveal scene a little using dialogue from elsewhere in the movie and I’ve got this so far. It’s not really working as a cohesive whole but I think there’s a few bits here that could have promise.
- I removed the actual reveal and just have Kylo poke at her insecurity re: the dark side, but Rey’s reaction and the music seem a little over-the-top for that. I did this because I intend to experiment a little with moving the lineage reveal to the previous Rey/Kylo scene but that’s probably a dead end. “Who you are… The dark side.” doesn’t really make any sense.
- I removed Rey’s defiant “I do.” from the end in order to leave it a little more open-ended as to whether she’s actually tempted by Kylo’s offer to team-up to kill Palps or not.
- I’ve tried to have Kylo suggest the dyad is something to do with them both being dark-siders or emotionally damaged or whatever. One of my aims with everything I’m experimenting with is to disassociate Rey’s dark-side fears from her lineage and associate them more with Kylo Ren, as I think that would better follow up TLJ and avoid rehashing ROTJ so much. I had to trim out the ‘what Palpatine doesn’t know…’ for timing though and that does become fairly important later.
I like how this plays, I think there’s only really two big issues, one I’m curious how the other scenes work now that you’ve cannibalized their dialogue, and two I’m not sure there’s really a big reveal moment here to match the music and Rey’s reaction (maybe there’s a way to cut that big swell?). I like cutting out “I do,” I think that works well. I think what she actually means in the film is that she’s going to kill herself rather than join him, which is an interesting idea, but the film undercuts it with the sound of the Falcon (I’ve tried to remove it but it’s not possible).