I like the way you think DZ-330! However personally, my only concern with that order would be you lose the transition from Chewie howling to Kylo standing alone on the Death Star, which I would be really sad to see go. I just think it works quite well and was pretty impactful the first time I saw it in cinemas.
How about this way? I may try mocking something up.
Focus on Leia:
- Poe, Finn and Chewie Receive the News
- Kylo Ren’s Redemption
- Poe Talks to Leia & Lando
- Palpatine Informs Pryde
Droids:
- Finn Talks to D-O
- Reunite & Artoo Restores Threepio’s Memory
Rey:
- Finn & Poe Talk About Occhi
- Rey & Luke’s Scene
- Resistance Track Rey