Strangely, it appears Jason Fry chose not to include the Phasma’s end deleted scene in his novelization. I believe that without it the whole Phasma stuff should be removed (which is what Poppa’s edit does).

Since this is a novel, obviously there is a lot more freedom. I think this scene should be included because it serves as a prelude to the stormtrooper rebellion that happens in my edit of TROS. Thing is, I haven’t had to actually write my own scenes just yet from scratch. So some help would be greatly appreciated here. As in, feedback on what I write when I get to it.