My suggestions generally improve Terrio’s dialogue in the opening scene with Kylo and Palps so it’d be less clunky.
That is fully YOUR opinion, and using that as an argument for a change won’t get you there in any fanedit. Actually explaining how the change betters fits or improves the character arcs will make your suggestions better received.
Please consider making your own thread for these or post in the Rise of Skywalker Fanedit Ideas thread and stop bloating this one with changes that are backed solely with “because I think it’s better that way” or changes that would be practically impossible to do.