I like this one. Only two modifications I’d make are removing the bold font of First Order and Resistance. Also, I feel like the last paragraph of the one we currently have is better. Although perhaps we could bold HIDDEN POWER in that one.
Here is the crawl with your suggestions:
Flames of rebellion burn across
the galaxy. Inspired by Luke Skywalker’s
heroic sacrifice, countless systems have
taken a stand in the name of resistance.
To suffocate this growing uprising,
the tyrannical First Order has silenced
all communication between neighboring
systems. Fear is everywhere.
Meanwhile, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren
has traveled to Mustafar, chasing
whispers of a HIDDEN POWER that
would allow him to destroy any
threat to his rule…