As for the dialogue, it is strange “now” that with Ascendant having the “flames of rebellion” in the crawl (also depending if the simple graffiti and background riot noise) that Poe says "everyone’s given up. The rest of his thought is fine, but the last part doesn’t really fit now. I mean, he may think “it is over” since no one is “joining up with the resistance,” but the crawl is already saying “people are doing stuff.” Maybe even removing that line can help with that? I mean, he should have at least the minimalist of information that people are starting to rise up … that’s the opposite of people giving up.
Again, the conversation is already not the greatest so I dunno if anything can be altered … maybe just:
“I can’t walk out on this war. Not 'til it’s over. Maybe it is.”
So then Zorii responds to just him thinking it’s over? Dunno how that would work.
Dunno, I admit I don’t have a good answer due to the new direction of Ascendant. (Which I like BTW)