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Post #1435482

Author
lorang
Parent topic
SUPERMAN 2 CRYSTAL EDITION
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Date created
13-Jun-2021, 6:16 AM

Sky_ said:

UPDATE 11th June 2021
Here is an update on what I have so far I would really appreciate some feedback as I can’t tell where I’m going wrong
the video has a time code on it, so if you have a suggestion please refer to that timecode.
so please take a look at it thanks, would mean a lot
stay awesome guys, and stay safe 😃

https://youtu.be/77IrNC9KEIA

These are my comments, if these are individual shots I would edit as follows, if this the beginning of the movie and flows as the video I would reduce and trim a lot more and add louder superman music to the background to ensure it all flows better as a recap.

101.23 – remove poor SFX shot, colours don’t appear to match and stands out/takes you out of the movie.
101.44 – remove or recolour SFX shot
101.53 – The glow on the rocket needs movement looks to static
102.46 – remove this shot as doesn’t match the others and stands out to much
103.02 – remove this shot, not needed and speed looks an issue.
(the destruction scene that follows substitute this music for something else of the superman soundtracks as the music is end of world and not Superman)
103.31 – trim this shot by a second so not to focus on the matte effect
103.35 – remove duplicate shot
103.48 – trim the scene, remove section when camera follows inside the building, and resume 103.58
104.06 – remove superman from this shot, he appears way to bright and the main image to pale and superman just seems to appear mid shot.
105.24 – the rocket glow to pale and need sound of the rocket engine cutting out to sell the shot.
105.47 – remove the final blue wave before the glass explodes as looks out of place to the rest of the shot just before.
(personal choice but I would add in the scream of Free when the glass explodes, can see you marked the shot not complete and the matte work on the original does need work as some of the characters appear to bright against the space background.)
107.39 – remove ship top of the screen, scene to busy

(Over the credits I would reduce some of the spoken words in the background and let the images do the taking, example the pimp talking to superman about bad outfit and the rescue of Louis, trim the scenes and let the image talk, some throw you out the school bus another example, tension has built then we appear to have a happy comment hey there’s Superman tone down some of the soundbites)

If this is the beginning of the movie in this order from a personal choice I would start with the Kyrpton trial and feed directly into the credits but utilise your hard word on the above and blend some of these scenes into the credits with the Superman theme and lose some of the others example the school bus on the bridge and carry on the destruction of the dam snippets may look more powerful in less is more and the villains flying to the moon as the music fades out.