I’ve been tinkering with that Poe/Zorii scene. Unfortunately, after getting my hands dirty with it, I think Cap was right about this one and I was wrong. The way Oscar delivers the Crait line, I have to agree that it feels awkward to try and segue from that to Keri Russell’s line. So here’s my rough suggestion. I may be overthinking this, and I almost definitely overengineered it. But that’s okay.
Changes:
- Swapped Poe’s line “Maybe it is” to later. Replaced it with a Poe sigh, from Disney Infinity, as a segue into the Crait discussion.
- Added “over” to “Maybe it is [over].”
- Cut some footage to remove “Everybody’s given up.”
- Changed Zorii’s line from “I don’t believe you believe that,” to “I don’t believe that,” mainly to make the line less clunky.
- Added Zorii saying “Just listen…” (Ideally, I’d want to find a better instance of Keri Russell saying this, so please let me know if you can think of any.)
- Added some “For Skywalker!”s. Looped some footage to linger on this moment a little longer, and allow it to resonate.
- It felt a little empty to me here, so I popped in some Force Theme.
- Removed Zorii saying “Remember?” I can only assume that this was a (very weak) reference to some past adventure she had with Poe; but that’s…kind of weird, right? Wouldn’t Poe have already learned not to give up, if he’s already gone through all of this? (Poe’s is less a character arc, and more a character trigonometric function.)
- Slid Zorii’s dialogue around a bit in the scene for pacing purposes (and to synchronize head bobs).
- Swapped around a couple shots of Poe, so that he nods after “There’s more of us.” (This also allows the final shot of the scene to hold a little longer, so I think it feels less rushed when we cut to the next scene.)
- Added combat sounds in the background throughout the conversation, but brought up the volume levels slightly when Zorii tells Poe to listen to it. (For a final mix, I’d want to confer with axlanian and get a sense of how he’s working on the combat audio for Kijimi.)
Also, I was thinking, perhaps it would be better to just have generic “rebellion” sounds when the gang lands on Kijimi, without any calls to Skywalker – they can hear that the Kijimi-imians are fighting the First Order, but don’t know why. Maybe Poe’s used to people fighting here? It is gang turf, after all. It’s only when Poe, at his lowest, hears the calls “For Skywalker!” that he realizes they’ve been fighting for something greater. That the Resistance has indeed brought hope. That perhaps, the war isn’t completely lost after all. (Perhaps, should he call on them later, his allies might even show up…?)
I don’t think this would affect any potential graffiti we’d add. Maybe the gang is still bummed that Chewie violently exploded, so they’re a little distracted and not paying attention to the details around them.