Hmm… I’m pretty torn on this. On one hand, you did some great work on this and it would be a cool thing to let the audience know just how Kylo knew Rey and Co. were going to Endor.
On the other hand though, I’m not a huge fan of Kylo having some Cerebro-esque powers where he can search through the Force for different people. IMO, it skirts a little too close to the ridiculous shit they had in the EU (like Jedi pulling down Star Destroyers from the sky and stuff like that). Also, I don’t think the line from Kylo after he listens to Leia is necessary. Just have him be silent while he’s Force Googling and then have the ANH callback when he finally finds Rey and Finn.