Speaking of being a Jedi, I’ve tried doing a little more work on that climatic line. It may be better, may be worse, maybe it will sound the same as the other tests. I don’t know anymore! I used Sade’s edit to the Palpatine’s dialogue, and I also fiddled with the “[And] I’m” cut a little more (in addition to the “am a Jedi” bit).
Also, just thinking generally about Palpatine’s lines… Rey could technically respond to either “You are nothing” or “A scavenger girl…”. So basically, the only order that doesn’t work for his lines is the one they went with in the official cut. Sigh…
Each time you do this, I think it sounds even better and better!
However, regarding your second part, I have to push back a bit. I may be the only person who feels this way but I think out of the two, “You are nothing” fits better as the final line right before “I am a Jedi” instead of “A scavenger girl”.
How I infer it, the scavenger girl line makes her response sound more like a “… Hey, wait a minute! No, I’m a Jedi. You can’t say that!”. Meanwhile, the nothing line helps to make her Jedi line feel way more triumphant as a retort. “You are nothing!” “[No], I am a Jedi!”
IDK, I might just be bugging about this.
Awesome, thank you!
For me personally, I think the most logical order would be, “A scavenger girl is no match for the power in me. I am all the Sith; you are nothing.” “I am a Jedi.” However, I think the longer pause before Rey responds flows better dramatically, so that’s why I voted against moving the “You are nothing” line into that pause. It just feels a little rushed at that point, imo. It’s all super subjective.
I was just pointing out that “A scavenger girl is no match for the power in me.” “I am a Jedi” also works structurally as a back-and-forth; so at that point, I think I’d go with the version that’s paced better.
It’s just personally preference; but I’m pretty sure the version I included here is the one Hal said he likes the best. (Hal, correct me if I’m wrong.)