Oh, yeah, I think that would work too. Like Dom said, if you’re just able to clean up the line a little more, it’ll be great!
Nice! I may tinker with it a little more then
Regarding a possible Plo Koon voice, I managed to put my hands on a lot of good quality lines from the old Clone Wars Adventures game. There is a line from Plo which says “You’ve shown great valor as a Jedi Knight”; it could fit both the themes of the scene and Rey’s personal arc.