I wouldn’t want to remove the “all the Sith” line without reason, although I wouldn’t say I’m crazy about any of this dialogue. lol
If you say the words out loud, “I am all the Jedi” and “I am a Jedi” you’ll notice the second has a more pronounced gap between the last two words. I know it’s probably super tricky, but I need to push you on it, y’know?
Yo, Hal, don’t you go disrespecting the Oscar-winning screenwriter of Batman v Superman and Justice League. Man’s a genius.
In my mind, I’m picturing it spun out of the original line delivery - “I…am all the Jedi.” So gap between “I” and “am” - “I…am a Jedi.” Are you thinking it should be more like “I am…a Jedi”?
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Nah, I don’t think that’d track.
I think retaining “And I…” would alleviate the feeling that something’s off. Maybe it’s from watching the scene a million times due to jonh’s work, but keeping that as well as Rey’s grunt as she contends with the lightning helps it feel complete.
I don’t know…I don’t think the conversation would flow naturally if “and” is included. “A scavenger girl is no match for the power in me!” “AND I…am a Jedi.” Agreed that we definitely need some line here though.