Okay, these are good changes.

We really need to keep Palpatine saying he’s all the Sith, though. The best one out of these edit attempts is the one where we swap the lines and have it flow like: “I am all the Sith! You are nothing, a scavenger girl is no match for the power in me.”

The two tries without the full timing and emphasis of Palpatine’s dialogue makes the zoom in on Rey and her response awkward.

Best of both worlds; keep both of Palpatine’s lines (which I would prefer anyway, this is fighting back and killing ‘all the sith’, somewhat solidifying this time is the end) and rework it in order to fit Rey accepting she’s a Jedi.
But, like Hal said, only if the edit can be 100% perfected. This is maybe one of the most important moments in the film, and has to land perfectly.

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Also, I really love “We can stop Palpatine… together.” It works so well in that clip.