EDIT: I also did a bit more work on this thingy: https://streamable.com/ffimpr
Blended out Palp’s Theme (I hope) a little bit better, cleaned up the word “a”, added a clip of Rey panting to cover up the omission of “and,” and also trimmed down the dramatic pause before she finishes her line (to help fudge the lip sync). Any better? The video cut on Rey’s line could be a little tighter and overlap the line on her catching the second saber more; I’m just worried about carving too deeply into the closeup shot.
I think “I am all the Sith” being removed works. Without it, it’s like Palps is saying “You can’t defeat me. You’re nothing. Just a scavenger.” Rey’s new line is a retort, “No, I’m not just a scavenger anymore. I’m a Jedi.”
With “I am all the Sith” Rey’s line just sounds like a one-liner, like “Yeah? Well, I’m a Jedi! Hah gottem!”