@sherlock I’m really picky about things, but this works for me. I’ve watched it several times and even just listened to the audio. The dialogue is fine to me and sounds so much more natural and fits better than the original. To me at least.

I do agree the music cue needs some more work and needs some fine tuning. Maybe just be the empires thing up to the “music pause” that’s already there may be an idea to try?

EDIT: I am specifically talking about the first one since to me, if I should that to my wife, she wouldn’t notice any difference and it works. The music just needs a little tuning, but the dialogue is fine to me.