Shit, sorry Kalee, I just realised I never replied to you.

Firstly, thanks so much for that extra bit of homework! I really appreciate you doing that, it was really valuable to have a bit of extra diligence on this one to confirm that my version was cherrypicking the right parts from the originals. I’m especially glad that you think that us getting into Padmé’s thoughts worked.

You’re another voice in favour of keeping Ahsoka’s “I’m not so bad” line - perhaps there’s a middle ground where I keep the line and him checking her out but I still cut out the camera ogling and perhaps her tutting about boys, making it ultimately a bit more sincere.

Noted on your spotted errors and suggested tweaks! I thought stretching out the bar music might be interesting but it looks like that hasn’t quite landed. I’ll think about slightly beefing up the infiltration plot too.