Is there any kind of quick shot that could go between the camera whip panning to the left and then whip panning to the right? The frames are similar enough that it’s a slightly jarring moment.
Otherwise, this is a big improvement.
Good point. Could probably trim that second shot a bit so that the pan-right is diminished, but I kind of like the disorienting nature of the cut as it’s a hectic moment for everyone involved.