Chapter 9 Changelog:

Another description of Ochi’s ship to match the idea that junkers lived in it
Just noticed that Rey claims in both the movie and this novel that she saw both Kylo AND her on the Sith throne in her vision. This is wrong, and has been fixed.
Removed the reference to the ticking clock
Made it clear that D-O belonged to Ochi (necessary for the new background story of his ship)
Removed all Chewbacca scenes (I may put one of these after Rey’s discovery, we’ll see)
Tightened conversation with Zorii
Zorii says Poe left the crew to rejoin the cause instead of join it. This is necessary because he literally grew up in a Rebellion family.
Added a brief custom scene with the Knights of Ren on Kijimi at the end. This is necessary because otherwise they come out of nowhere later on.
Link:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1HVHAsnDZbBJONFo4_KvxnZ41n8CofC-X/view?usp=sharing
Here is the custom scene. Don’t think it’s 100% perfect yet:

Ushar led his fellow Knights of Ren down a frigid alleyway on Kijimi. Tracking the Resistance scum down had been easy; Ap’lek had wisely secured a homing beacon to their escape vessel during the chaos of the girl exploding a transport. The Night Buzzard would have easily lost them in those icy planetary rings if it weren’t for the beacon. Now the real trouble was scouring this wretched city for wherever they had traveled to.

Ushar had never witnessed such a grand spectacle of darkness until that moment in the desert, even from Kylo. If the girl were to ever usurp Kylo’s position, he was sure the rest of the Knights would accept her as their master without hesitation. But for now, they were to follow the instructions Kylo had given them to the letter.

“Kylo Ren wants the girl alive,” he reminded everyone. “Kill the rest.”