Imhotep, thanks very much for this feedback - that’s all really useful.

TOTLC:

Noted on all of the text, I think those are some good suggestions and I’ll do a little polish pass soon.
I think I’ll stick with Rex and Cody in the control room working it out, because it’s kind of cool how, unlike a lot of TCW, it’s shot in quite a subtle way, and you have to watch the eye movements, rather than it being an explicit verbal thing. I think it’s a nice touch. Good idea though!
I don’t think I can trim Gregor’s amnesia either, since that would make it hard to get from A to B in this storyline. Also, I think this helps his later appearance in Rebels. Since that appearance has a mental health component, I think it’s worth maintaining evidence of the mental damage here too.
Agreed on the TOTLC intertitles. They’re still unfinished. I’ll have a think about how better to open into each episode, without front-loading all of the text too.

Shadow:

I’m not certain what to do about the Jedi order essentially pimping Padmé out or using her as a Honey Trap. I think it helps to lean into the angle that they’ve kind of become tools of a corrupt Senate and continue to drive a wedge between Anakin and the Jedi, though agreed, it is a bit weird.
I’ll look into Lott Dodd’s plot reveal. I had thought about removing that before, and can’t quite remember why I decided it should stay. I think perhaps because having it be mysterious took away from Clovis’ selfishness. But I’ll check this one again.
I’ll also check Clovis’ ‘I love her’ line. It is very strained. This one’s kind of a decision between making Clovis more of a legit creep (which I’m fine with), versus making him a bit more of a serious threat to Anakin because he genuinely loves Padmé and he’s the jealous type. I might check the Scipio arc soon and see which best serves his character.

Assault:

The only reason I highlight Luminara’s absence is because she shows up at the halfway point of this story and some of the characters comment on it there. I figured having one Jedi implicitly absent might increase the stakes and make the plan feel a little more scrappy. Does that land, or do you reckon I should switch that line out for something else?
I’ll review the cuts at 16:00 and the fade at 32:55, thanks!

Great feedback and much appreciated, thank you! Please keep it coming!