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Post #1423292

Author
dzabdehat
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The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
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Date created
11-Apr-2021, 8:44 AM
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11-Apr-2021, 8:49 AM
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dzabdehat
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I’m so happy I could help getting you guys those lines!

I really, really like “A Highly Trained Resistance Spy v2”, but I don’t think Jannah’s “really?” is necessary and would instead move the bearded guy shot to after C-3PO’s line. That way bearded guy’s facial expression seems to say “Ok, this droid is a weirdo” which works as a sort of punchline or a beat at least. Then Rey follow’s with her request, since C-3PO spilled the beans anyway. Also, would “you needn’t worry, it appears” fit before “I am a highly trained resistance spy” or does it make the pause too short?

The “ally” line would work well that way too, I think.