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Post #1422766

Author
CaptainFaraday
Parent topic
The Rise of Skywalker Expanded Edition by Rae Carson: The Faraday Edit (WIP)
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https://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/1422766/action/topic#1422766
Date created
8-Apr-2021, 8:20 AM

Ninth chapter:

https://pastebin.com/j96ZKvPA
Password: CaptainFaraday

Changelog:

  • Chapters continue to be reshuffled (this was originally chapter 8, now it’s 9, I’m not gonna bother listing that any more because the numbers are all just shifted one higher).
  • Mostly just quality-of-life edits and smoothing the flow of the text as usual.
  • Changed D-O’s name to D-0. Droids usually have letters and numbers in their names, and the original spelling looked weirdly wrong. Also, added “Deeyo” as a “written” name for him in dialogue, like the other droids get (eg Threepio, Artoo, etc).
  • Added cherry blossom trees and kawara tiles to Kijimi, since it’s basically just Space Japan anyway.
  • Made Zorii less murderous in her introduction, since it doesn’t gel with the rest of her scenes with Poe.