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Post #1422713

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Icecream2448
Parent topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released)
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Date created
7-Apr-2021, 8:20 PM

Yeah, some line breaking it up in between would make it work. As is, it’s a little too sudden for Jannah to say they’ll help them, even with the later context of her being an ex-Stormtrooper. Her being so helpful immediately feels unnatural.

Edit: It feels too sudden dialogue wise. Cutting to silent reaction shots still doesn’t work for me either.