Chapter 2 Changelog:

HUGE thanks to Captain Faraday on this chapter. His formatting, specifically at the beginning, was an incredibly helpful foundation.
More streamlining of descriptions, replacing complicated words. You know the drill.
Rocks around Rey are properly described (Google Treasure Planet rings)
Overhauled/simplified Leia’s perspective on Rey. It’s clear that she is aware of some source of darkness in Rey, but is more afraid of her refusing to take action than actually falling to the dark side. She wants Rey to learn peace and courage to combat this.
Leia’s training was three decades ago, not two (I did the research)
When Leia is thinking to herself about her Jedi voices, mentioned how she still hasn’t heard from her father or forgiven him
Cut a flashback to Luke and Leia training which served no purpose narratively
Luke’s lightsaber is now just as crackly as Kylo’s. Rey couldn’t fully fix it, even with the Jedi texts. Emphasized how this makes Rey feel undeserving of the weapon and self conscious about herself.
More clearly suggested that Rey uses the dark side to destroy the training remote
Removed Mustafar from Rey’s vision, and overtly stated that she sees herself on the throne
Included the beginning of the next chapter so that it transitions to Poe and Finn properly
Rey no longer tells Leia about her vision (seriously, why did Rae Carson do this?)
Rey returns the lightsaber to Leia every day because she feels unworthy of it since she broke it and couldn’t fix it completely. It’s also Leia’s last reminder of Luke.
Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1GaJ_Klgxiwhtwt_2sxzr2j-sEhZPz8pG/view?usp=sharing