I see what you’re saying, sherlock, now that I could look at the scene properly. For Rey to be zoned out, it would ideally be the first part of the scene. However, there’s too much time between where that would place “how busted is the landing gear?” and the crash landing for it to register as comedic, not that that needs to be a dealbreaker on its own. As it is in V1, there’s a second or two of breathing room introduced in the transition to arrival on Endor by reversing the final shot of Finn and the establishing shot of space that would be a shame to dump. I imagine it feeling awfully breakneck to smash cut out of that super tight cockpit scene.

It seems to me, and I’m known to be conservative, that our best shot at truly getting away with an alteration is to make it subtle and play nice with how the scene was presented in our source material. Perhaps after the cockpit scene, we cut to the quick shot of the panel that Rey and Finn are working on spark, then the new closeup of Rey as Finn asks, “Endor? You sure?”. In order to work, it cannot linger and should just be a short reprise of the whisper with perhaps a quick flash or something relevant.

I may not be able to do any editing for a bit, but I’ll keeping track and will have some work mapped out when I am able to.