Chapter 1 Changelog:

Used Hal’s opening crawl
This was originally chapter two, it is now the first chapter
Replaced words that were needlessly complicated. Also changed numerous small details and descriptions throughout. General streamlining.
Used some of Faraday’s descriptions of Vader’s castle and Mustafar
Palpatine’s message was sent exclusively to the First Order
The Eye of Webbish Bog knows everything about Kylo. He falls under the archetype of a mystical being from legends/fairy tales.
The aforementioned change leads into Kylo thinking about his plans. See the original post above for a general rundown on this.
Kylo travels to Exegol purely to destroy the Sith and steal their secrets for himself
Removed some of the unneeded description in Kylo’s travel to Exegol
The statues on Exegol are clearly identified as ancient Sith Lords, and Kylo’s disgust with all Sith except for Vader is brought up again
Replaced Snoke clones with Palpatine clones
Snoke is implied to be an apprentice of Palpatine that heard his voice in his head. It is not specified whether he was an artificial being or not.
Made it abundantly clear that the Palpatine on the crane is a clone as well but with his real spirit inside, eating it away over time
Explanations of Kylo’s understanding of essence transfer and how Palpatine is inside a clone body
Reduced the amount of Star Destroyers and stormtroopers in the Final Order. This is because they are now an Imperial stockpile. The Sith Eternal is a combination of former Imperials and Exegol natives.
Kylo instantly identifies that Palpatine is tricking him or Rey into an eventual possession and decides he needs to convince Rey to join him in stealing the fleet for their own purposes

Link:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1bRHQrb29WzMgQM8QRwRZ_5F5NIsua5J-/view?usp=sharing
I’ll provide a complete PDF on PM upon project completion. Until then, each document will be one chapter at a time.