Well, if it ain’t broke! (Edit: That sounds kind of dismissive now I read it back! I used what you wrote with minimal changes because I liked the way you phrased it. Especially the line about becoming a Dark Sider before the end of the journey.)
3PO’s infodump was in the original text, so that was a great opportunity to add the extra ideas about the forest moon. I just changed the info he subsequently dumps to yours instead.