Update:

I’ve been working for quite a while on a final draft of the above story, but in the refinement it has become practically new except for in its broad plot elements.

However, I have gradually conceived of a far more thematically relevant tale necessitating a new plot. The new story does away with Thrawn but is still in its early stages, yet this crystallized for me at about the halfway point of writing the ‘final’ draft. I have half of a story sitting on my computer, a story which I can’t imagine I will finish.

So, is there any interest in this half of a story before I scrap it in favor of a new attempt? It feels like a shame to leave it languishing, what with its full dialogue and description, especially since I felt like I finally found the soul of this story in Finn’s journey to save his brethren soldiers.