Damn, that is some fine work, Nev. Seeing this finalized shot really sells your intent with this whole idea of Rey wanting to leave with Finn. Hell, her saying “I’m leaving” works even better with this new context! And adding her running around looking for Finn in the vision is gonna sell this idea even more I think.

I think it is great as is. I do wonder if flipping the shot of the ship might work better with the eye line though. Rey is looking toward the right, so I feel like it would flow nicely if the ship was on right side of the frame instead of the left. Showing the ship from the opposite angle as before might also help unconsciously show the audience how Rey and Finn may have missed each other. Does that make sense? Haha. I had that thought of flipping the shot the first time I watched the clip, but I didn’t think about it as much after. So I think it is fine as-is too. Also, I think the volume of the voices is fine! Just another layer that helps sell the moment.

The tracking device thing sounds good too! I’m glad to see you back working on this project. I remember when we first were brainstorming the idea for the tracking device “light”. Feels like forever ago.