Well hey, I see what you mean. Earlier I read into it more subtlety than it really seems it has. Merely removing “for just minutes” could indeed streamline things. They don’t follow up on this really, unless it’s when Poe says “this is our last chance we gotta hit those cannons now!”
What’s he mean by “just minutes”? That after that the ships will be oriented again?
Christ almighty, this script really has no idea what it’s doing, does it? I mean, yeah, that was my takeaway from “just minutes.” But it doesn’t make sense, because the only thing “uniting” the Sith Fleet is the navigation signal, and then once the signal is knocked out the Rebels leave and all of the Sith ships crash, but there’s still another nav tower on the ground, and, and I just…aaaahhhhh!!
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What if we also trim Poe’s second line (after the lightning storm stops) to “I’m back on. This is our chance, we gotta hit those cannons now”? It’s an ADR line anyway, so it should be pretty easy to do.