Awesome tests!
I know there is a pretty brief time period before Rey begins speaking, but I actually think it’d be nice to combine both examples, “Well, that’s the important stuff dealt with.”
I don’t know if there is enough time to fit in Rey saying “No”. (I think having her say “I” at the beginning of that sentence would be nice, too) I think “Well” would work better if it was inflected like a question. Like, “Well?” or “So?” I know there are very limited options though.
Looking back at that scene, even if we couldn’t find something perfect to fit in the beginning, I think it would be nice to have Leia ask, “Why?” in that wide shot, at the very least. So it goes like:
Rey: Didn’t finish the training course. Got distracted.
Leia: Why?
Rey: I’m just not feeling myself.
See? Just one extra word makes it feel more like an actual conversation. “Tell me” could fit in there too.
Also, I feel like the added lines could potentially be ever so slightly pitched down or something. Leia just seems to speak a little deeper in TROS than she did in TFA, or her Lego lines more specifically.