*Rey shields
I always liked the version:
Desert woman: “Who are you?”
Rey: “None of your business, that’s who!”
Iris to credits
Noticed in the opening crawl, the third sentence ends in a comma when it probably shouldn’t. (“…whose crystal factories produce ray shields,”)
Goddamn it, I removed that comma so many times, but I kept going back and forth on the credits. Somehow, comma survived.
Thoughts about Malevolence
Disclaimer: I watched the original episodes a while back, but I don’t remember these ones well at all. So if any problem points below are in the regular episode, sorry! Also, apologies if any of this has been said before!
I like that there’s still tension between Anakin and Ahsoka, her outburst and Anakin’s chastening after feels right, especially with having this episode pretty early on. The pacing worked well for me, I liked that it was faster. I also liked the humanizing moments of the clones and how that contrasted with the general opinion that clones are “expendable”.
The cut between Anakin and Ahsoka rescuing Plo Koon and the Malevolence coming out of hyperspace at 16:46 felt abrupt to me. I don’t have a surefire way to fix this, but if there are any establishing shots of the Republic ship to bridge the gap that might help. Otherwise, letting it fade to black in between and allowing a couple seconds to breathe in between would also work.
Scratch that, the whole section (up until 17:33) feels a bit wonky. I wasn’t sure when the cuts to the other Republic ship were taking place chronologically (are they flashbacks or happening simultaneously?) And the iris transition after Ahsoka says “I’m sorry Master Plo” also had a split second where the shot with Ahsoka and Plo Koon reversed? Other than that center section, everything else flowed well and was paced perfectly!
EDIT: I just finished looking at the most recent version of The New Padawan, and I think having the Clone Wars logo just appear adds that extra bit of punch which feels great. The added Bail Organa shot definitely helps to sell his inserted line to Anakin too.
YES! This is the kind of meaty feedback I like.
On Christophsis, that’s good to know. I’ll stick with punchy CLONE WARS logo if nobody else objects, and match that timing for my future episodes. I was really pleased with that Bail shot. It’s from the Hidden Enemy newsreel, but it’s awesome that Bail even looks up to the sky, as if he’s watching the transport ship come in.
On Malevolence, this is super useful, thank you. The scene of Plo discussing the ion cannon intercut with the Malevolence destroying the medical transport was experimental - and the main reason the episode was released as a review cut as opposed to a release cut - and I agree it doesn’t work and needs to go. I’m going to remove the intercutting entirely, and just return to Plo explaining it’s an ion cannon to Ahsoka and Anakin (also a fabricated scene, but a far easier one to make work).