Going from that angle, I would definitely consider leaning into what apparently was an earlier cut that emphasized Palpatine being an old man on his death bed.
I agree about leaning into that angle. I hesitate to have him explicitly say he’s dying, though, because then Kylo’s big sell to Rey kind of becomes “together we can be strong enough to kill an old man who will die anyway if we do nothing!”. But the general tone of making him appear physically decrepit and defenceless also helps to highlight the power of his words and manipulation, before he restores himself and busts out the Mega-Lightning.
This should go in the writing and re-writing section, not the fanedit section.
I mentioned offhandedly in the original post that it felt like the wrong place for it. To explain what I meant a bit more, that section is focused exclusively on the creation and editing of short documents - pieces of writing, such as screenplays, which aren’t intended to be consumed as finished products in their own right, but are stepping stones towards a finished product (ie, a movie). A novel, on the other hand, is a finished product intended for direct consumption, more comparable to a finished film. I’m also not creating new material out of whole cloth; I’m editing extant texts, making my job that of an editor rather than a writer.
I actually did post something I wrote over in that section which I felt was more appropriate; obviously I reckon it’s good, so I recommend checking it out, haha.