Y’know, could keyframed zooming remove the slight camera zoom during that second shot of Luke? That might help sell it so that the first shot zooms in and then we merely cut back to that angle again.
It’s not a zoom, it’s a dolly/boom (the camera is moving) so it’d look pretty odd. I think in this scenario it’d be better to just stay on the shot of Rey.
MR, that’s a much better placement of the line. I still feel like it’s a bit unnecessary? But I guess if the idea is to remove “you’ll take both sabers” then it does have some purpose.