I didn’t think my episodes were being produced with subtitles, Hal, so the fact they have any is a suprise to me! In all my demuxing and rendering, subtitles aren’t a part of my pipeline. I did make a trim there though, deliberately cutting those lines, so ideally the subtitles wouldn’t feature either.
I’ll take a note to think about a fade on the Sidious beat.
Kalee, lovely notes thanks - this is exactly why I share this stuff.
On Grievous Intrigue, my notes say that he’s got some real malice in this episode, so it does serve as something to strengthen Grievous. I don’t know yet if that makes preservation of the whole episode worthy, but I’m considering it. The other option I realised we have is possibly taking the good malice (which I think I remember being mainly upfront) and turning this into Grievous capturing Even Piell, leading up to the Citadel arc. There’s quite a lot of Piell getting captured footage in the Citadel newsreel which might work.
On Younglings, thanks for the detail. I hadn’t noticed the models change but I’ll compare them. I do really want to keep Maul as an ever-present threat, who just keeps growing in power, and that really starts with Revival, so I want that early. I’m tending towards keeping the Younglings arc in some form since it features more of Ahsoka teaching, which I want to lean into in this edit. So ideally I can play Revival > Younglings in that order. I might have to downplay the Grievous vs Hondo angle in Younglings to achieve this, so there’s no implicit clash. The Florrum base doesn’t need to have been sacked by Grievous, I don’t think that’s a particularly important plot point.
One thing I was thinking about Younglings though is that you could probably drop the first episode altogether - as much as I do kinda like it - because really the Younglings shouldn’t be the focus of the arc, Ahsoka and our main characters should. I think that can work. (And of course I’d still release the first episode as part of my Continuity Cut if so, so it’d be there if people wanted it.)
I really like that note about the investgations. In the final season I want to be emphasising the mysteries of the war, so having the Jedi act in response to the O66 arc and mentioning that in my crawls seems like a good idea plus a nice nod to continuity, thanks.
(I’ve already put a couple of cheeky nods in my crawls in a couple of places, though nobody seems to have noticed yet 😉)