I agree as well, but that’s slightly out of my talents haha.
I tried your new line and it sounds completely natural now. But it does feel a little squished. Needs some space to breath.
id like to hear the newer version you made.
https://youtu.be/QqQTZyZAbn8 (latest)
Did my own slight audio fade out only because the line is so squished into there.
Also Nev, I’m not entirely sure why you feel they are no longer a master/apprentice. She is still being taught by Leia, and if he weren’t dead, he would still be her master.
I think it’s too squished, and like i mentioned i think getting hold of the 5.1 audio and putting a space between lesson 3 and the word ‘confronting’ would make it blend better, quality wise you could totally fit the line into the movie, it just needs room to breathe.
i hope someone can PM you the dialogue so you can tweak it.