I do think that works.

I do like the new colors of this scene, especially while they’re inside the hut. The darkness, plus the warm hues, makes it feel cozy.

I know you said it wouldn’t work, but in my mind, I do like the idea of starting off with a night establishing shot (maybe you could brighten it slightly to make it feel almost like a morning twilight, or just leave it dark). The scene of her throwing wood at the TIE fighter only shows the sky in one or two shots just in the corner, so perhaps they could be recolored or replaced.

I guess, in general, it would require more work to make it seem like all of the light is mostly coming from the fire, but I feel like the best way to make it feel like time has passed would be between the two island establishing shots. The first being night, or a dark morning twilight. The second one at dawn, and then we finally see the sunrise as Luke is lifting the X-Wing. I would probably try to make their sitting conversation outside a little darker too, to better match how dark it looks from inside the hut. But I guess you could argue that is just an exposure discrepancy. And going from darkness to dawn feels like it would fit well, thematically. Rey starts off in a dark place, but as she talks to Luke, the light appears.

But it might be too much work for little purpose, so I understand why you wouldn’t pursue this.