The line sticks out since it sounds a bit different, but it also sticks out since its cramming more words than the “space” of the original line.
I dunno if it is realistic to do cleanly.
Exactly.
So I suppose this question is for everyone else to chime in on: do we think it’s worth it to include this line change while making it sound augmented/strange at the same time? I know what my answer is at this point (I’d rather not have it).
Of course, Hal kinda has the final say.