You should definitely leave “in the force” in there, as otherwise the viewer might not know a dyad is related to the force.
Anyways, I can’t tell a difference between your first clip, creation, and sherlock’s one. But if people think that your first clip sounds better than sherlock’s then great. I just don’t want to mess with removing the end of the line is all.
What I did to sherlock’s clip is really small, there was a pop/click sound as he said “we’ve”, but it’s only a small change