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The Rise of Skywalker Expanded Edition by Rae Carson: The Faraday Edit (WIP)
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28-Feb-2021, 1:04 AM

That’s great! Definitely an improvement, I’ll add it in if that’s alright. I was worried that it would overcomplicate the core idea being conveyed, but it just strengthens it. And that final line is fantastic as a result; the final line I’d written was the part I was least happy with, too.